Fanfic Title: ♥ Flair & Fleur & Key ♥

Fanfic Author: th1rd3ye

Reviewer: xiaoxi

@ dark side (http://darkside-jj.blogspot.com)

Title: 9/10

I personally feel the title would look more professional without the heart shapes. At first glance, I honestly have no idea what ‘flair & fleur & key’ meant. I thought it’s going to be a tangled three-party relationship with two girls of ‘flair’ and ‘fleur’ going after Key. Nonetheless, the fan fiction developed into a romantic story, which I slowly grew to understand and found that the title is indeed suitable and unique.

Foreword: 8/10

I think the foreword is just fine, except for the way you introduced the Key and Eun Na. Even in a book, you won’t find introductions such as this:

♥ YOU
- Won Eun Na
- A famous and beautiful publisher
- Had always been secretly in love with Key Kim Ki Bum

The author would slowly reveal the personality of the character instead of just feeding it to the audience like you did.

Giving excerpts of your fan fiction, however, has successfully lured me into the fiction.

I did laugh though, when I came across the second sneak preview whereby the email was typed. I don’t think anyone would send a mail to your friend by addressing him as Almighty Key and therefore typing ‘To the Almighty Key’.

Appearance: 8/10

The poster and background gave me direct mood for the story - a little fluff, and definitely away from angst. It’s a really pretty poster too. However, please note that certain parts of your fan fiction is a little straining on the eye because your font is black in colour, which happens to camouflage quite nicely with the eyes of the cartoon characters in the background. I had to highlight the text in that area when reading.

Plot: 15/15

There’s only one word to describe - sweet. I thoroughly enjoyed the fan fiction which caused much laughter.

Flow: 10/10

The flashbacks and present are well presented, and the transition was smooth.

Originality: 9.5/10

The plot was fairly creative and original.

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 10/10

I managed to catch only a few specks of mistakes as I was reading, therefore it did not really inconvenience me in my reading experience. I seldom give out a perfect score in this area. Well done!

Characterization: 9.5/10

Key and Eun Na’s characters are both well developed despite it being a short fan fiction. However, I felt there was a little something lacking, which I can’t seem to pinpoint. Maybe it’s how Key and Eun Na are both well known figures and yet they seem to be free from the press and news? I haven’t seen them handling the paparazzi. Just a guess though, because as I’ve mentioned, I can’t really locate that missing factor.

Writing Style: 10/10

Your writing style is clear and easy to comprehend.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

Bonus: 3/5

I like authors who interact with readers and stories that can make me laugh :)

Key as the main character definitely made it a plus too!

Total: 97/105

Reviewer’s note:

Thanks for choosing me as your reviewer! I must admit I’m impressed by your work. It is really rare that I give out high scores. Your writing is well planned and easily understandable. Key (which happened to be my favourite out of SHINee) made the fan fiction even more enjoyable. I really felt like smacking Eun Na at times, though. How can she forget the scent of someone she missed so dearly! T.T

Good luck and thanks for requesting!

Xiaoxi, loves.